This is actually a pretty good troll, but I think you still need work. In places your prose is a bit too climsy--remember, silent trolls, the kind that sneak up on you so that you only realize you've been had after you hit the "Post" button, are by far the most elegant. Let us analyze your second paragraph:
"What ever it takes to defend freedom, you can count my unquestioned support behind it. Unlike you people, I care for my country, I care for our freedom and I will not hesitate when I know my servicemen have to take the life of a enemy to defend everyone of us. So do my a favor and grow up, the powers that be know what's best for us, it's why they're in charge. You people who sit at your computer all day bashing our government are naive, ignorant and do not understand the realities of the world, 20 year old punks who should be forced to serve in the military for 2 years."
The assumption you make of k5 readers being exclusively of the United States is a stale hook--this kind of thing rarely even brings token replies from the non-U.S. readers anymore. Your patriotic profession preceded by "Unlike you people" is good--keep that. It's the kind of prod that will trigger visceral responses. The juxtaposition of "do not understand the realities of the world" and "the powers that be know what's best for us, it's why they're in charge" lacks artistry, however, and will trap only the truly naive. And the "20-year-old punks"/2-year mandatory service bit is tossed in as an afterthought. This is a pity, since I think you missed an opportunity. You should have followed your second paragraph with a provocative thesis, e.g., that mandatory military service would cure the lack of "patriotism" and "love of country" among the foolish youth. You could provide some references to other societies where such service has been a success--Israel and the former Soviet Union come to mind, but historical anecdotes such as Sparta and the Apaches may have served--and I'm sure you could find a clever William Bennett quote to drop in here, though you would have to be careful with your choice as to avoid betraying your trollish intentions.
Alas, a squandered opportunity. You have potential, however. Just remember, never confess to trolling--the meta-game is so very hard to pull off effectively.
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